Heritage (retitled)
Angsana tree by the river bank
blooms a yellow-orche crown
that perfumes the air
and rains a golden carpet the next day.
(revised)
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Angsana Tree (original title)
Angsana tree by the river bank
blooms a yellow-orche crown
that perfumes the air
and rains a golden carpet the next day.
And reminds us of our heritage.
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NaPoWriMo - 29 April 2006
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2 comments:
You are right it does not need all that addational line
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On 8 May 2006, Annie left this comment:
"The revision is far stronger with just that simple shift. Good one."
I don't know how it got lost but it did while I was fiddling with the blog contents and layout. Sorry about that, Annie.
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